Breaking Dawn; Revised Edition
Well for those of you who were not satisfied with Breaking Dawn and the perfection in Bella's life, this story is for you. We're taking a heavy duty (haha doodie...)vacuum and sucking out the sugar, leaving the main plot, but adding a little dash of pain and maybe a few more deaths. Hope you enjoy! PS- This fan fiction belongs completely to Stephanie Meyer...All the characters, writing, etc. etc.
M'kay, a friend and I read Breaking Dawn, and let's just say, we weren't very happy with the outcome, so we've decided to try and re-write the story with a little more drama. I also really hope I don't have to change the title because I can't think of anything creative enough. XD We're sorry if we're slow because for one, there's two of us here trying to collaborate, and we're also a little (okay, maybe a lot) behind on summer reading for this up coming school year. We'll keep it going as fast a possible though! Thanks!
7. Chapter 3; Part Two
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“Can I see her?” Renee’s voice shook with excitement.
“Mom!” I came out of the bathroom, pulling the dress up so I wouldn’t trip. Luckily, Alice had thought this through. The dress wasn’t long in the front. It was just long enough to touch the ground as I stood, but while I walked, my shoes came out, so there was nothing for me to trip on. The train, however, was a different story. Whatever material she’d taken off the front, it seemed she added it to the train, making it the longest, most luxurious train I’d ever seen outside of a Disney movie. It fell back around three feet, and the bottom edge of the dress was embroidered with a vine that laced its way along the side of the dress. The dress itself was perfect in shape. It came down with a low v-waist, and gently and slightly loosely hugged my hips and thighs before flaring out into the train.
“Bella! You look gorgeous,” Renee exclaimed, holding her hand by her mouth while she held back tears.
“Mom, I’m so glad you’re here!” I reached out and hugged her. She and Phil had had to take a late flight out because Phil had one last game before he could leave, and they were going to leave tomorrow afternoon because Edward and I would be leaving for our honeymoon.
“Oh, honey. How could I miss my own daughter’s wedding?” she crooned.
“Okay, well it’s almost time for Bella to be going,” said Alice, nervously checking her silver watch. “I think you should take your seat.”
“Okay,” she replied, giving my arm a squeeze. “Good luck, honey. Enjoy yourself!” Then she walked out the door and Alice started pacing.
“Calm down, Alice,” I laughed, but my laugh was cut off by the look on her face. “What’s wrong?”
“Nothing. A vision. It’s fine,” she said quickly, putting up a smile. She looked fine now, but now I was paranoid. Was something going to happen? We stood there for another fifteen minutes until the music floated upstairs. Charlie, who I hadn’t noticed patiently waiting outside the door coughed now.
“Go! Go!” Alice whispered frantically, handing me a bouquet and holding her own. Jasper, Emmett, and Rosalie were already waiting on the stairs, and once I grabbed Charlie’s arm, the set off the stairs and a dreadfully slow pace.
My heart thudded at an amazing pace as I stepped carefully down each step. Every pause between steps seemed to take an eternity each. I looked out into the crowd, able to tell the vampires from the humans, many of which I didn’t know.
The Cullen family was a well-known family, and as Alice sent out the invitations many vampires were invited to keep their popularity up among the others.
As I got closer, the rest of my siblings-to-be leading Charlie and me down the aisle, my eyes caught Edward’s. His face was happier than I’d ever seen it; ecstatic. His smile spread across his face and his eyes danced, taking in my appearance. My face was hot from all the attention and excitement, and I could imagine why Alice didn’t want any blush added to my face. If anything, she’d probably want powder to lighten my complexion before I flushed red as a tomato.
Charlie took my hand from the crook of his arm, and with a gentle pat, handed me to Edward. I could already feel my tears welling up. Edward pressed a quick kiss to my hand and led me to the alter, his eyes never leaving mine, and mine never leaving his.
“Dearly beloved, we are gathered here today, to join in marriage, Edward Anthony Masen Cullen and Isabella Marie Swan, “ began the little wheezing minister.
My heart beat erratically. The only thing keeping me calm was the cool hand, still holding mine as we faced the minister. He continued with the ceremony, until that dreaded part came.
“If any person has just cause as to why this couple should not be together, speak now or forever hold your piece.” I wondered for a moment why we didn’t just cut this part out. There was an awkward silence while we waited for anybody to “speak now”.
There was barely a rustle of fabric, and then, “I object.” My eyes widened.
Edward’s eyes narrowed and the crowd whispered. Could someone actually stop a wedding? Could their words make the minister refuse to marry us? I could feel myself panicking. Was Jacob here? But then Emmett burst out laughing, guffawing like a bear with the hiccups.
“Emmett, you jerk,” I said. At this distance, a human wouldn’t be able to hear, me, but I knew he did. Alice was glaring knives, and I knew she was contemplating ripping him to shreds right now. Jasper was quite obviously calming the little bunch, while Rosalie gave a little smirk.
“Please continue,” Edward said to the minister. “It was just my delinquent of a brother playing a impractical joke.” His voice was on the verge of a growl. The minister turned to me, and I nodded in agreement.
“Well then, erm- do you have your vows?” We nodded in harmony, Carlisle, Edward’s best man, and Alice handed us our cards with the vows written on them. Edward’s was merely a prop, but under pressure, I didn’t know if I could speak my own vow.
“Isabella Marie Swan, Bella, my love and life. You are my heartbeat. My reason for existence for without I would die. If you will let me, I’ll do anything to make you happy because you have made me so happy. Before you I was so alone, too stubborn, or too weak to give into something as powerful as love, but now that I have, I don’t want to remember those days. Bella, you’ve shared your love, your warmth, your soul, but now, I’d like to ask one more thing of you. Will you share my life with me?” A tear broke through as I blinked my eye. My hands shook as I looked down at the card, my mind drunk with overwhelming love so that I couldn’t think properly. He cupped his hands around mine for a moment, and Jasper edged closer. A wave of serenity washed over me so that I could continue.
“Edward Anthony Masen Cullen, since I’ve met you, you’ve always been here to protect me, my own personal guardian angel, and I’ve been trying to think of ways to return the favor,” my voice trembled. After listening to Edward’s vows, mine sounded so immature compared. So human. “They say opposites attract, well I guess we’re just proof. And I love you so much, and I’d like nothing better than to live with you as your wife until the end.” My stomach twisted. That was horrible. I should’ve had Alice write it for me, but then it wouldn’t feel sincere, but even now that I’d written it myself and spoken them, they still didn’t feel sincere. I felt like there was more that I needed to say, but I couldn’t find the words like Edward could.
“May the rings come forth?” The minister held his hand out towards Rosalie, and she handed him a little velvet draw-string bag. He loosened the strings, and let the rings tumble out, handing them to both Edward and me.
“Edward, do you take Isabella to be your lawfully wedded wife, in sickness and in health, to guard and protect, guide and be guided forever, so long as you both shall live?” Edward smiled his half-smile.
“Isabella, do you take Edward to be your lawfully wedded husband, in sickness and in health, to guard and protect, to guide and be guided forever, so long as you both shall live?” I smiled back as more tears fell.
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